Peer Group Workshopping Sheet Paper
- Does the title grab your attention? (The paper title should notbe “Paper #2” or “Analysis of Chat GPT.”) The catchy title should hint at the focus of the paper. Help the author come up with an effective title if needed.
I don’t think that the title is catchy, but it means there are a lot of inaccuracies throughout ChatGPT’s essay, which I like because as a reader it summarizes what most of the paper is going to be about.
- Does the first paragraph clearly include the following?
- an attention-getter (like a relevant and smoothly incorporated quotation followed by a proper in-text citation)?
- the author’s first and last name?
- the title of the book (italicized)?
- the title of the ChatGPT article (in quotation marks)?
- and the thesis?
Which does he/she not do? Offer suggestions.
The first paragraph was a great introduction. A correction the author could make to the thesis is state it clearer and together. The author did italicize the story’s name but not what she wrote nor her first name.
- THESIS: Where is the writer’s thesis statement? (It may be one to three sentences. It should be at the end of paragraph one.)
- Does the thesis clearly answer the questions from the Paper #2 Assignment?
- Here they are: How well does Chat GPT analyze the theme of displacement in Edwidge Danticat’s short story collection titled Everything Inside: Stories? How accurate and effective is the paper generated by Chat GPT, and how could it be improved?
- Could someone disagree with the writer’s thesis statement? (They should be able to disagree.) Does it take a clear stand? Does it remain in third person (no “I” or “you”)?
- How could the thesis statement be improved?
The author does a good job introducing the thesis statement and she clearly answers the questions from Paper #2. The author made a clear stand on how she feels about ChatGPT’s essay, how it should be improved, and how ineffective ChatGPT is. To improve the author’s thesis, move your thesis statement from at the start of your paragraph to more towards the end of your paragraph. She also stays in third person throughout the story and says no, “I” or “you”.
- CLAIMS: Look at the body paragraphs in the paper. Each paragraph must contain one claim that makes a statement/takes a stand. (Claims are kind of like topic sentences, but they are different in that they assert a point that’s subject to disagreement. Claims are the writer’s specific points that help prove the thesis statement.)
- Is the claim in each paragraph the first sentence? (It should be!) If there are any paragraphs that don’t start with a claim, note them here.
The author did a great job putting her claims in the correct spot for each paragraph.
- Which claims seem to lack focus? (Each claim must make one point.)
The third paragraph seems like you may have lost little bit of focus starting this paragraph and stating the claim as you started with, “consequently”.
- Is each claim subject to disagreement? If not, explain which claims need to take a stronger stand or need to be improved.
All claims seem to have a clear and strong stand with explaining in detail about the inaccuracies and effectiveness of the ChatGPT essay.
- Does each claim help prove the thesis? How could the claims do so better?
All the claims help prove the thesis very well.
- Do any of the paragraphs in the body of the paper start with a question? Directly quoted material from the book or essay? They should not.
- (A claim cannot be a question since it must take a stand. Directly quoted material is used as support for the claim; therefore, it would be in the middle of the paragraph.) Note anything that should be changed here.
All body paragraphs do not start with a question.
- Make sure that the writer is not just writing about one example per paragraph. A good claim makes an assertion and is followed by several examples from the short story collection and the ChatGPT essay. Explain any problems you see.
The author uses the right number of examples.
- SUPPORT/EVIDENCE: Support for each claim comes from the two sources: the ChatGPT essay and Everything Inside: Storiesby Edwidge Danticat.
Support must be included as summary, paraphrase, and direct quote (three or more words in a row from the novel need to be in quotation marks).
- Does each paragraph contain at least three pieces of evidence to support the claim?
- Which paragraphs have ample support/evidence?
- Which paragraphs need more support? Offer suggestions about which examples might work.
All her paragraphs use ample amounts of support, although I do not see enough use and textual evidence from the actual book, I would suggest pulling more evidence from the book to provide more evidence for each claim and to lengthen your paper a bit.
- Keep in mind that good papers use paraphrased or summarized anddirectly quoted information in each paragraph to prove the claim. The author should not use onlydirectly quoted material from the sources.
- Which paragraphs need more development? Offer some ideas you have about how to develop these paragraphs further
The third paragraph seems significantly shorter than the others, though the author does get the point across and uses some good pieces of evidence, to lengthen the paragraph a little you could provide more pieces of information to help support the claim.
- Which is the most well-developed paragraph? Why?
The author’s second paragraph provides an ample amount of evidence, supporting her claim in depth and well.
- Which paragraph needs the most work? Why?
Paragraph two, it’s not a bad paragraph just seemed rushed as the reader and could be more specific and more in detail to support the claim and make a clearer understanding of the paragraph.
- ANALYSIS: Make sure that the author is not only summarizing the ChatGPT essay and/or the short story collection. Analysis is where the writer of the paper delves deeply into the evidence and points out why it’s important. (Think of analysis as the writer of the paper explaining the evidence from the sources, interpreting it, and analyzing it.)
- Each paragraph needs to have three parts—a claim, evidence, and analysis. Each time some evidence is provided, the writer of the paper should comment on/analyze that evidence. Where do you see the author analyzing well?
The author does a good job of being equal with the claims that she makes, and the evidence and analysis that supports it.
- Each paragraph MUST be a combination of evidence from the two sources and analysis by the author. The paragraph should be 50% evidence and 50% analysis. Where does the author need to provide more analysis?
The author does seem to use a little bit more evidence to analysis ratio throughout the story. Provide more analysis after you use a piece of evidence.
- I’m looking for depth of critical thinking here. Does your classmate fully explore how accurately and effectively the ChatGPT essay explores the theme of displacement in Danticat’s book? Does your classmate state clearly how the essay could be improved by using specific stories and examples from Danticat’s book? Offer suggestions for improvement.
The author talks about very important points in the paragraphs she provides. Going in depth and analyzing after each piece of evidence would be very beneficial to make your evidence to analysis ratio 50-50. Since you did not use many quotes from Danticat real book, you could use those quotes to provide more analysis.
- Is the evidence from sources and analysis from your classmate interspersed in each paragraph? (The writer of the paper should make a comment after each piece of evidence from the sources, not just in one block at the end of the paragraph.)
The author does a good job spreading it out and keeping her comment and pieces of evidence organized.
- Does the writer use an in-text citation after all specific details, examples, dialogue, etc. from the essay and the short story collection (via quotations, paraphrases, summaries)? All specifics must be followed with a proper in-text citation to avoid plagiarism. If not, explain the pages/paragraphs where the author needs citations.
- If the student writer integrates specifics from Everything Inside: Storiesin the paper but doesn’t use Danticat’s name in the signal phrase/lead-in, then the in-text citation will look like this: (Danticat 95). The author used no page from in the paper, as the author did not have any in text citations.
- If the student writer uses Danticat’s name in the signal phrase/lead-in in the paper, then just use the page number like this: (95). Same as above.
- Is every detail, fact, example from the ChatGPT essay followed with this in-text citation? (“Exploring Displacement”)? I did not find any in text citations of (“Exploring Displacement”).
- Every detail, example, fact, etc. (whether quoted, paraphrased, or summarized) must be followed by a proper in-text citation. This means that each paragraph will have several in-text citations. After she quoted something, in a few spots she doesn’t cite after the evidence using (Danticat –).
- Make sure that the end punctuation (period/question mark) comes afterthe parenthesis. Quotation marks come next to the quoted words. Mention any needed citation changes here. She used no parenthesis.
- Whenever the author of the paper uses three or more words in a row from one of the sources, those words MUST be in quotation marks and must be followed by an in-text citation.
- Look up two of the quoted excerpts your classmate uses from Danticat’s book and the ChatGPT essay in the paper to make sure they are quoted exactlyas they are written in the text and are followed by the appropriate in-text citation.
- Note the page number and specifics of which quotations you checked and note any necessary changes: